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Hi. I wrote this poem and I have no idea what to think of it. I thought of trashing it ‘cause it just seems too dark for my taste. I don’t usually write like this. What do you think?

she sits within a cask of her tears

torn by the revelations of yesterday she’ll drown, she’ll drown straining for an ounce of life to breathe

her pain swells into a murky shape wrought by each silent cry

and how she feels the very essence she wrote in blood for him poured from a place that she will never escape

and so she dies in her pain knowing that he’ll never crave for her again

~Kaff~

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Answer #1

good word choices, good style- not too dark- I like it

Answer #2

I like it…but of course I some times write dark poems. so to me theres nothing wrong with it :]

Answer #3

I like it.

Answer #4

it is sad/gloomy but honestly its really good …its written nicely, it has a constant theme, it flows well, and it reflects mayb how you felt when you wrote it…good job

Answer #5

AHHH thats so freaking sad! are you depressed!?? c a doctor dude!!. if not um its great but waaayyy 2 sad 4 me.

Answer #6

its not dark at all I’ve written poetry about a child killing their mother and eating them. its weird I’m more into rythmic oscar wilde style poems, but I actualy liked that… and I never like non rhyming poetry… but yeah it worked

Answer #7

it is a lil bit dark 3 out of 5 :)

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