Poem I wrote, what are your opinions?

Just wondering if anyone could tell Me what they think I wrote this one nite while being depressed The comfort of your arms when day is done. There may be those who’ll tell me time will pass And I’ll forget the magic of your touch, But I belong to a peculiar class And absence makes me love you twice as much. So rest assured the spell will always last Unhampered by the knowledge that you’re gone. You’re still the symbol of a lovely past
Someday, perhaps, you’ll learn as well as I That love is not an easy thing to die.your not Even gone and I miss you. You seem so far away

I feel like I am being sucked into the black hole Of death the death of the inner me screaming for Someone to take my hand and pull me out I feel alone And lost and though as strange as this may sound not Fulling conscious and aware of whats going on the pain Is slowly eating me alive the tears drowning me the salt From them burns my badly broken heart holding on not Knowing how much longer the sadness weighing me down Reaching for someone thats not even there I feel my mental grasp slipping away slowing Will you take my hand and pull me out?

Answer #1

Sh!t, thats some bloody good writin you got there

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