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What should I call my poem and what do you think about it??

This is my poem : sometimes I feel like I’m lonely  a tender desspair posseses me I have my world on my own  Where reigns clarity

Cz Hope no more I own  Scattered and shattered it lays For my heart is ripped and thrown And my life seems like a maze

Well did you now that’s how I felt? Did you know it begun when you left? you drew nothing in my head Just  sweet bitter thouts mislead

And every time I look at the sea At the sun down at the trees I know that this world is a quality  But what’s wrong it’s me

Now I feel so alone  I think I’m gonna mourn Yh I’ll mourn my loss And then I’ll burry myself under your thourns

Just once I bagg Pretend to love me  Ure good at lies u’ll fool me I’ve figured it out already   Lay on my lifeless side

Can I die with a smile? Pleas say you love me

Mesery prowls around Feeling a sudden pain  Thinking I’m not sane I fall to the ground 

crimson blood covers my buddy I see liitle peaces of glass 3inches deep in my flesh

And then I gasp Realizing that these are the broken peaces of of my heart

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Answer #1

love it but use a thesaurus and try and change common words in a poem you dont have to spell everything out either make it as creative as you can

and as for what to call it … what is the first word you think of when you read it ?

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