What do you think of my poem called Lies?

Lies,Lies,Lies The World around me is nothing but lies. I’d Rather die The to hear another lie My heart crys from all these lies

Who can I trust Who can I believe if everyone I love is lieing to me

im going crazy im going inscane when will people stop lieing when will I stop believeing

All these lies are doing are hurting people there hurting me when I dont want the truth I cover it up with a lie.

the lies in my head are taring me in pieces all my dreams I had in my heart are crushed and fallling apart and I dont think I can take it much longer

Dreams,dreams,dreams please be here to stay.

Lies,lies,lies please go AWAY!!!

Answer #1

there should be they’re not bad, I like the basic scheme of it kudose for breaking it into stanzas the last 2-3 stanzas I’ld say are my favriote part of the poem

Answer #2

Wow , thats wonderful!!! I don’t belive the lies that cover the truth , ,I think you should add that in there somewhere :] But thats my opinion , its you too you :]

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