What do you think of what I wrote?

I just wrote these tonight, im not finished but I would like some feedback. Just out of curiosity. Be completely honest.

When it began there were hands holding tight Cradling the life that we breathed that night When it began it was fragile and fresh It spoke our work, it had our sweat

We wrote out our lives In a language we couldnt speak We let our minds produce the sound As we were stll too weak We let our hands work away Untrained of the art We let our hearts beat free And for the first time so were we

I never understood strength in numbers We were few but our will was unmatched I never understood why we would wander Each step of new land we just left in the past I never understood what we were after Continuing the search after it had been found I only understood exactly how it felt To divide the sky and break the ground.

Answer #1

Love it. Love to hear more lyrics from you

Answer #2

thats actually kinda good

Answer #3

nice Job buddie

Answer #4

thats FANTASTIC!!! :) :) :) :) :)

Answer #5

I think it’s reeeaaallly good!

Answer #6

Seems like the words were chosen carefully; brilliant, in my opinion.

Answer #7

Awesomeness I say, you are gifted dear

Answer #8

WOW THAT IS SOO AMAZING1YOU ARE REALY GOOD!!!

Answer #9

LOVE IT!! your an amazing writer!!!

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