this is kinda like a poem but uhh yea.. what do you think?

Everything was great that day, They were both happy. She felt on top of the world. She thought that they were inseperable, And felt he thought the same.

She waited for that night to come, When she could finally see him. She waited and waited and waited and waited.. The night was finally here!

She saw his face and immediately ran to greet him. She gave him a great big hug But wondered why he didn’t hug back. “Maybe he’s just having a bad day” she thought.

But then she hears those dreaded words, “It’s not going to work” In the blink of an eye.. It’s over… Just like that…

She couldn’t believe that the one she once had was now gone. And in total shock, she cried and cried in front of everybody there that night. Her friends surrounded her with hugs and support, And that’s all she felt she needed at the time.

But when she got home that night, and was all alone, Everything seemed to be falling apart. She was so confused, and didn’t understand why this was happening.

The sleepless nights seemed to drag on, And the tears never stopped. Nothing anybody said could make the pain go away. And now she’s just another one of those broken hearted girls, hoping to someday find “Mr. Right”

Answer #1

I think that you are a very strong writer. Keep up the good work.

Answer #2

I really like he story of it, and it has very strong feeling, but I like poems that rhyme, but thats just me!! haha

Answer #3

Thankss!! =]]]

Answer #4

Thanks guys! Thats a true story.. happened to me just on Wednesday…

Answer #5

im sorry that happened to you but try to think that guys…well you dont need them. I dont have a boyfriend and im fine. just focuse on yourself and your friends for now and you’ll be fine.

Answer #6

thats so sad.realy well writn tho,and peopl can identify wiv it,like me lol why don’t you try publish are try a poetry comp?its def a poem just freestyl.well don xxx

Answer #7

I thinks thats realy good

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