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what kind of man are you? too modest to ask for help? too scared to walk down a dark alley with six flashlights and a doberman pincher? too blind to realize that the person who wrote this loves the hell out of you?

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Answer #1

I think it should be longer,more detailed,and have some sort of rhyme scheme and/or structure…like you know how when poems rhyme no matter how the rhyme scheme is there’s a structure like for example this poems struture is A,A,B,A,C,D,E,D,F,G,H,G,I,J,K,J,L,M,N,A an you can see why that is…I find it easier to write poetry if I set a random structure and try and stick to it, I dunno why…

Everything’s wrong, A Days are too long, A Sunshine’s too hot, B Wind is too strong. A Clouds are too fluffy, C Grass is too green, D Ground is too dusty,E Sheets are too clean. D Stars are too twinkly, F Moon is too high, G Water’s too drippy, H Sand is too dry. G Rocks are too heavy, I Feathers too light, J Kids are too noisy, K Shoes are too tight. J Folks are too happy, L Singin’ their songs. M Why can’t they see it? N Everything’s wrong! A

Answer #2

Sure is Good.

Answer #3

I lovin’ it :]

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