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How would you rate this poem honestly?

This is random; I’m writing it off the top of my head. On a scale of 1-10, 1 being disgustingly horrible and 10 being spectacularly amazing.

Blinking eyes open dazed. see hands shaking writing in pain I fell asleep. the letter is short words scribbled slow and the pen is dropped his head falling backwards

I read the letter and it says- Katie, when you awake I want you to know I love you.

Justin, lover and a friend, 1967, June 10th

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Answer #1

Ha thanks you guys and cuddles88 I don’t know what you mean by me thinking that person was boring? Psh Brittenynicole what’s that supposed to mean? :D Don’t be shy- bash it trash it and have a nice day!

Answer #2

um..your poem sucks lol no offense. you gotta put more thought in to it. you cant just write whatever comes up to your head, you gotta think about it first. it didnt really make sense. it doesnt really flow. doesnt give the reader an image. good luck tho!

Answer #3

5 it seems that you were really into someone but that person is so boring that they put you to sleep. sorry but yu need to put some more thought and feeling into it.

Answer #4

6 It seems sincer and concise.

Answer #5

3 1/3

Answer #6

3

Answer #7

I didn’ t really understand it too well… So I’m sorry to say, but 4… But If you added more details, or a prologue or something, than like a 6-7. It was kind of random. He died? When’d the girl get the letter? You’re missing some good details, memi. =P

@ Brittenynicole. You’re a bit rude, aren’t you? there’s nicer ways to put things. ^^ I’d like to see you write a poem, miss. =]

Answer #8

1 totally I mean c`mon

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