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Could you rate my poem from 1 to 5???...

Could you rate my poem from 1 to 5???… 1 would be,the lowest

And 5 would be the highest...

Just want to know if it is good… So I could present it 2 d class…???

Youve sang my agonizing harmony, Youve painted colors on my sight, Youve lighten up my dim world, Youve found me unconcious

 And woven my wounded heart.

But why???, words pitched at me,

 Your gaving it all up,
 You throw it all away,

That hurtful words was killing me inside, You left me broken hearted.

Baby,its hard on me to tear myself away from you, Nor, I dont want to be a fright and pretendings everythings alright. No!, I wont even sit here and die…

Im ganna lick d knife

 W/  all my tears...

Im ganna embrace d chain,

 W/ all my blood,

Im ganna scream w/ d gun,

 W/ all my heart,

Im ganna swallow swords,

 W/ all my pride,

Just 2 have you again.

So this time, im ganna throw it all away,

 One hundred forty three words...


      I love you..!!!

^^… Thnx…^^

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Answer #1
  1. The first stanza was acceptable, even if it had a glaring lack of punctuation. The rest is honestly rubbish–something everyone else writes. Actually, the first stanza was, as well. Just awful. Write more.
Answer #2

5

Answer #3

haha…

sure on your votes guys???…

because im still really nervous to present it…T_T

maybe something get wrong…T_T…

I hope I could get high grades on it…T_T

Answer #4

5!!! that’s so goodd!!

Answer #5

5 that was excellent!!!

Answer #6

5 that was really really good

Answer #7

OMG I LOVE IT!!! 5

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