This is something i wrote a LONG time ago, i just added another section( i do over time) honestly,what do yu think?

Its getting harder to hold on to you,

Your slipping with love for other girls-better girls-girls you claim have nothing on me.

Everything you do makes me wonder, wonder why Im the one who you find salvation in- the one you entrust your heart to. When there are so many better people-people you sometimes seem to love more.

I guess its not so much that Im losing you-but that im letting go.

But i never really will-my love for you is frozen at it’s peak-incapable of decreasing.

So really all this now is a lie-to myself to cure my lonesome- to try and convince myself everything will be alright.

It wont.

This will happen again-those other girls you say you dont love as much as me- you will turn to them, not me.

But even afterword..you always come to me-arms open wide.

Im not so sure of the point of your ways.

My hold on your heart seems to be getting smaller and smaller-even if you say it isnt.

Maybe its because Im here, i promise Ill be with you someday.

We will be together one day- Im reasurring you now as you always do me.

One day this’ll all be better-I promise.

If you just hold on long enough…


More time has passed,

I find myself reminiscing, and realizing my foolishness.

Its not perfect now, but it will be.

You’ve stuck with me through everything so far,

We’re going to make it, you no longer need to remind me,

I already know it.

But still time and time again you find me crying, your comforting words drifting to me,

I can almost hear your voice.

Your arms reaching out, holding me at your chest.

Your heartbeat is like a lullaby,

Your breathing relaxes me and i calm,

If only it were real,

Sometimes it seems just like a fairy tale.

I find myself wishing it was, somehow it seems that itd make more sense.

Are you real? Or just a figment of my imagination,

What if one day you just simply poof away?

Leaving me once again with this numbed feeling,

this feeling i had before you came.

I wonder how i would continue on without you,

Would i be able to? Its highly unlikely.

Id be alone again, uncertain, uncaring.

But your real, my Prince Charming, your no longer just a shadow.

But your still not yet with me, i may seem confident and strong,

But i truely believe, that there is no safer place than in your arms,

If only i could take sanctuary in that restful place…….

Answer #1

i luv it !!! itz rlly good

Answer #2

thanks =D

Answer #3

ur welcome =)

Answer #4

It seems too… Forced or something. It doesn’t really convey a lot of emotion to me.

Answer #5

okay ill work on that =D thank you

Answer #6

wow.. its beautiful! its very emotional but thats what makes it beautiful. i write poetry like that, i even write about love, although ive never been in love before. ive never had a bf. but anyway good job. publish it. :)

Answer #7

It’s good… but too many hyphens. :P

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