Who can tell me if what I wrote is good??

I promise that the poem doesn’t continue like the beginning for long..I just wanna know what you think..

Tears fill the eyes of those who made mistakes..tears never leave the eyes of those who were once in love..love makes people feel invincible…love is deceptive..love is nothing more then waiting heartbreak..failed attempts and empty promises..love is nothing more then dreams and wishes unfulfilled..Love screws up lives..love makes people lie..love hurts those who are fool enough to believe in it..yet love is sacred..love makes you feel as you have never felt..it makes you feel as if you’ll never be alone..love is always close..even those who feel unloved are loved by someone..every person has their soulmate in life..you will have to be strong enough to endure all of the losses, the deceit, the lies, the guilt, and the pain but there will always be one person who will always be there for you and never hurt you..when you find that person you will know..you will feel as if you were reborn you will feel as if you’ve never been hurt..you will feel as if you aren’t human as if you were something more something stronger something more loving and compassionate. Love is something that will make you believe that all your hardships all of your heartbreak all of your pain and all of your suffering was worth it..all of the tears you shed all of the pain you’ve felt all of the lies you’ve heard will seem as if they were distant fading memories…

Answer #1

Thats soo good, but a little hard to read! Stanzas may help!!! For simple folk like am anyhow.

Answer #2

One word..WOW!!! That is amazing!! I wish I could write stuff even half as good as that..and it’s so true </3

Answer #3

thanks guys…and I woulda put stanza’s but I was just a little lazy at the moment I typed it

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