I wrote a POEM! tell me what you think!!

k, I wrote a poem, I’m not actually emo or suicidal, that’s just how it came out, so tell me what you think!

Just a kiss, a pussh foreward, a moment in time Just a love, never leaving, till the world falls awry

But what can be done, and what can be said Thoughts, swirling and rolling all through my head

All things good have become all things bad So where does that leave the moments we had?

just leave me alone now, to my thoughtless ways just leave me alone to battle the days.

I survive dark cold nighs of confusion alone Just by sitting and wishing, and holding the phone.

Afraid as I am to call out to you Even more afraid of what you could do

So here I sit, planning escape finding the best way to leave no hate

As the moment of my death draws nearer again I leave out a note explaining my plan.

the blade feels so cold against my warm skin. and I think of the roller coaster life has been.

I picture your face as the blood hits the ground the life we could have had dies without a sound

I fall to the floor it’s the end of my show I forgot to bow, but no one will know.

Answer #1

no problem…

Answer #2

ok, thanks.

and I will, they’ll probably love it, its like the best poem I’ve ever read :]

Answer #3

cool, thanks

Answer #4

ibeastit: FA is being dumb and not letting me funmail you, so you can just credit me as my penname: Ecco BonVie

and you need to tell me what your classmates and teacher think =P I’m reallyjust looking for feedback here =P

Answer #5

I did my project today, and they loved it.!

the teacher even asked for a copy of it.

Answer #6

no, go ahead, I’ll funmail my name so you can credit me, that’s my only stipulation on this

Answer #7

I absolutely LOVE it.!

would you mind if I used it for a poetry project at my school.??

Answer #8

I love it it really deep

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