what do you think of this poem?

cheer and happiness, forever gone from my head, for within my mind, they’re practically dead. all things that begin, must sadly end. and so my emotions are now all pretend. we hide ourselves beneath masks. who am I, is all I ask. for do we see who we are? or do we see what others think we are?

Answer #1

huh, intresting, short but crisp.. I like it (: the only line that I thought was a little weak was ‘who am I, is all I ask. ‘ no offense or anything, I’m just helping you out.. so if you tweak it a little bit and still have it flow it’ll be better. nice job (:

Answer #2

yeh its short, I didnt really put much though into it. my friend kinda requested I write something about death, and about being uncertain of who you r. so yeah, thanks for the tip, ill edit it now.

Answer #3

I really like this one :) You are very tallented in your writing, keep it up

Answer #4

Koool.

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