What do you think of this poem?

He looks into her big blue eyes. He asks “do you love me”? She sighs softly. She asks “yes. Do you love me”? He smiles, and whispers in her ear. “I love you, only you”. He says. She hugs him tight. Despite his height. He strokes her cheek. A kiss to seek. He bends down slightly. She breathes in lightly. And like a sudden clap of thunder… Everything is a blur… With that kiss, shared between him and her.

Is it any good?

Answer #1

Thank you. Sorry about the literature!

Answer #2

very nice, but I agree with the structure changes :)

Answer #3

NO OFFENCE BUT THATS NOT REALLY A POEM

Answer #4

that is amazing :)

Answer #5

that IS poetry, its called free verse!!! and I think it s pretty good, poetry doesnt have to rhyme at all. I like your poem, its great, but lie I always say I think you should leave it for about a week, than come back to it and see f there is anything you want to change.

Answer #6

yeah thtas pretty good. do you like poetry?? I hate doing it, but that is a really good poem.

Answer #7

that is such a good poem I have written a couple poems myself but I dont think that any of them are as good as that

Answer #8

Its nice. But you need a system. Like at the end, you have words that Rhyme. So it has to be like that throughout the whole poem. Like for example, match the 1st sentence with the 3rd. Like you can just have, softly, she sighs, and then it’ll match. Just need a lil fixing. But I love it. Nnice work.

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