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What do you think of my poem"unseen love"?

This is hard to write down on paper But I will do my best I feel like I should do this later Sorta like when im doing a test

Everytime I see you I think ill do something stupied Everytime I see you I feel I’ve been hit by cupid

I’ve had many crushes before But this one is real I like you for your personality I just wish you could like mine too

We belong together Like the stars and the moon I cant wait to see you again I hope it will be soon

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Answer #1

I think it’s terrible. It’s trite, you’ve mispelled stupid as “stupied”, and the entire first stanza is completely irrelevant to the mooning in the rest of the verse. Ugh. Really dreadful.

Answer #2

I like it! It’s very honest and open. The way it flows isn’t perfect, but who cares? Poetry is about expressing yourself and the way you see things, and the most important thing is what your poem means to you. Keep writing! :)

Answer #3

It is pretty bad, but I wouldn’t trash you for it like that person. ^^^

Answer #4

it’s kinda of good I’ll send you a funmail to let you know what mines sounds like ok lol

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