What do you think of my Poem?

its really good so I cant think of much to critisise, but maybe you could use more detail

~~brain0763 That was the girl, it’s symbolism. ~~pretentiouspunk I agree it needs work, however, before calling someone an amateur point out the errors needing work.

In my personal opinion I believe it would sound better if you removed “the” before “trees”, first line in the first stanza, from the second line before summer in the first stanza, & “the” last line of the second stanza.

Perhaps broaden your vocab and use of words a bit then revise it with more ‘advanced’ words. For instance “Opened doors crusted with rust “ Could be “Doors left ajar, scabbed in rust”

“brittle leaves lay across its surface” Could be “Brittle leaves lay abroad the surface”

Don’t be afraid to mix up your rhyme scheme. The same AABB CCDD become banal and dull. ABAB CDCD is a bit better(speaking from personal opinion) But again, mix it up a bit, give your own twist. For instance I did my own scheme ABEAB CDECD in one of my own poems, Endless Masquerade

Overall your poem isn’t bad and does have potential

pretty good you need to mention the girl more often maybe use some more creative words. but all in all pretty darn good better then me thats for sure. :)