What do you think of my poem?

I call it one day…it felt so good to take this negative feelings and create somethng positive..what do you think?

One day I pray to lose control

            Dont wanna be coherent 
         Just wanna crawl into my hole
             Dont wanna hear it
       Give me my crutch so I can stand
            Im nobodys role model
          Everything tastes so bland
         And I love the way you coddle
       One day I plan to stand on my own
              Just not tomorrow
       One day ill show you how I've grown
         You wont be so full of sorrow
         Tell me that youve had enough
           One day I plan to listen
          I know youve had it rough
           It wasnt my intention
      Youre voice ringing though my head
          Burns my brain like fire
    I remember everything that you once said
         And I proceed to get higher
Answer #1

awesome. :)

Answer #2

It would be better if you use proper English rather than slang.

Answer #3

thts some really good stuf there

Answer #4

thats awesome (: , I like it.

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