We can't find the internet
Attempting to reconnect
Something went wrong!
Hang in there while we get back on track
What do you think about my poem?
It is incomplete I wish to know what imagery it convey so I know if it conveys what I see in my head.
Wings beat against glass Vainly struggling an envious grip, Delicately tearing Between spiteful fingertips.
This seraphic beauty is in the devil’s grasp
Feathers cascade In descending red cataracts, So handsomely frayed Amongst the seams of the act.
(COPY WRITE PROTECTED)
Again, incomplete It is about the r@pe of an angel Don’t ask The phrase wings against glass inspired me to write, then the image came to mind, I managed to mold and re-write it to what it is now I’ve reached a bit of a block(hopefully it will soon end once I finally complete this). Perhaps a few opinions may help.
yes like I stated, it’s incomplete hoping for constructive criticism I need some kind of dawning of inspiration
thank you for your kind words ^_^
this poem is great. like I can see what your sayin except for the last line you kinda lost me. your really good.
bah, they changed the title on me I’m asking for criticism and opinions please
and thank you those who commented above
I like it. This is of course the way I see this poem, but that’s what I like about poetry, that it can be read and understood in different ways.
It’s dark. And fragile. And I like that.
Nice :-)
Its good. keep at it.
You might tell more about the emotions they are haveing or sensations maybe contrasting carictoristics could try a simile might also try to show the change of evens does one corrupt the other or change the others ways? good poem so far has potential, keep up the good work.
Made me think of this image.
-
I want to leave a poem - 1 Answers
I want to leave a poem for people to , tell me what they think
-
What do you think of my poem? - 1 Answers
I had to right it for English class, I enjoy writing it now lol. This is deep, something you want to keep, you would even go ...
-
What do you think of my new poem? - 4 Answers
I hope that one day you will see it my way. Till that day, you see it the unclear way For love is hard to give without taking...
-
Do you think that Lenore from the poem "Lenore" is the same Lenore from The Raven? - 1 Answers
I mean both were written by Edgar Allan Poe, but i wonder if he means about the same girl or not or its just a coincidence. W...
-
What do ya think about this poem? - 1 Answers
'when I am in his arms im in heaven When I lean into his kiss nothing else matters When I look into his eyes every thing is p...
-
What do you think of this poem? - 5 Answers
I loved her I cared for her she was my true love she was everything to me evedentaly I was nothing to her she used me a...
-
What do you think? I wrote a poem! - 4 Answers
I made up a poem, tell me what you think: Willow tree, willow tree why are you so sad? She is no longer sitting on your bran...
-
What do you think of this poem good or no? - 4 Answers
Before I put the poem down I would like to say. It not weird for a boy to make a poem ( I think :d). And this is the first on...
-
What you think of my new poem? - 5 Answers
I promised I would always love you , you promised you would always love me I promised I would never let go , you promised you...
-
what do you think of my poem?? - 2 Answers
what do you think of my poem?? I just started to write occasionly please tell me if you hate it!!! CLOT I am this way and yet...
Poems Please
Literature, Arts & Humanities, Education
Diamond Nail Supplies
Nail Supplies, Beauty Essentials, Salon Equipment
KitabDeal.com
Books, Education, Personal Development
Shopnobilap
Literature, Online Publishing, Community
Kathi Sohn's Self-Help Resour...
Self-Help, Personal Development, Psychology