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Just want you to honestly make comments bout my poem, if you like or not. Stuff like that. I know, I write too much poems but that was I love to do. :) Sry it doesnt rhyme, thou.

In the halls, I talked to my best friend of pale Stand and look, in the same directions

A group of brown walked by My mouth curled up but their were straight Cold chills meet my eyes, pure hate

Silence came and everyone froze I had realize what was going on The group stepped away, laughing hard My mouth curled down, smile gone Tears fell down my cheek, the pain escape

I am a stranger, forgotten Dont belong to my own place A digust, traitor To my own family and race

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Answer #1

that’s really good. I love it!!!

Answer #2

I like it. But the grammar needs to be fixed. (I.E. My mouth curled up but theirS were straight. I had REALIZED what was going on. Tears fell down my cheekS.) Thats all I noticed. Otherwise it was really good.

Answer #3

I like it, but some of the grammar needs to be fixed.

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