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1-10 My life is a mess, I cant find where im going , if its up or its down..I’ve serched all ar-ound. so im up in the clounds looking over ci-tys trying to find my wa-ay roundd…

oh eh, oh, eh oh.

Life is a whirpool , a marry go round..im looking for my luv, oh luv. im only chasin my tail like a dog does triple, bfore settling down, oh settlin down-own-own.

I am in a mess-ess-es and im looking fo-or my luv, I am in a mess-ess-es and im lost in my head. where did he go, there or there, saw him only yesterday, but he never notices me ,im lost in a yander tree. so help me know, im stuck without a heading, is it up or it down, im stuck upsidedown.

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Answer #1

thanks I will revise it

Answer #2

Honestly this song has no catch so I rate it a 4, but it does have a lot of potential. Don’t use such silly wording, it makes your lyrics/song sound comical instead of serious. People like music with lyrics they can relate to and this is definitely something I cannot relate to.

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