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Rate my poem...part deux

Love in its grip tells us to watch out. Be careless and you will be hurt. The love from my heart is but a spout. but is my demon’s blood red? or a lush green vert?

When a Devil gives its heart to someone… what does it mean? Is it a love beyond compassion? beyond the world and beyond existence? or does it mean a pathetic attempt should not be redeemed… these thoughts continue in my head with utter persistence

All I know is that Devils never cry. Then what am I? Does this mean forgiveness gives me one more try? Or that I should die?

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I think the poem needs to have more of proper words that makes the rhyme okay, and the construction per verse has to be polished… on a lighter note, I like the message that it has that effect of giving out repercussions of lovin and that rhetorical question at the last part of it that makes it a bit more dramatic… work on the rhyme and you’re all good… :-)

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