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This is a poem I wrote a while ago.

She hears the whispers in the wind. She cries blood tears,but no one sees her pain. Sorrow creaks in her soul. It mourns slightly as she cries herself to sleep. Deep inside contains happiness,small proportions that slowly fade. The escape she once had,but promised to kill echos for attention. She tries not to give in, but everyday it gets harder. Now that he is the only one stopping her from her old ways,she needs him more than ever. Memories of the red liquid repeat and call for help. She repents for forgiveness. The last leaf falls and she is afraid to look up and realize this. For when all hope is lost and love is just a lie,we return to the blackness of the night. The moon and the stars have all fallen and the sky quivers all alone. We wait patiently for the sun to rise,suddenly comprehending that it shall not. Weakness is granted and we have lost our final battle. The battle that could have saved me. So what do I have left? Nothing. I'm gone.
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it’s actually not half bad:)

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