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I look at him He looks at me We stare at eachother for an eternity I want to know what to say But I just sit there Falling away

I just want to call out to him And I just want to tell him how much I love him But its not true love Its a love I cannot describe this love to you Cause if I do you’ll say screw you

I tell this guy how I feel And all he says is “thats not true” I try to hide the sadness and the pain I don’t want to love him again

I feel his hand touch my back As I walk away in a defeated stack And then the tears come up and leak out over And I brush his hand lightly off my shoulder

I weep and cry and blubber away And the pain I feel it lasts all day When I see him in the halls When I see him at the mall All I can think of is “why me” Why can’t I just be care free?

I try to say that I will live But the truth is I won’t I won’t survive without him And I won’t survive without the man I thought I loved And that I don’t All I want is for him to slit my throat

Take away all the pain Make it go goodbye again Get him to say he loves me back See you can’t and thats a fact.

Try to avoid him everyday But the truth is I can’t its insane. Slit my throat Stop the pain Save it forever To use someday!!!

This poem is all because larry broke my heart, lol not. What do you think? Is it good or bad?

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Answer #1

I really like it. Don’t kill yourself. I’m your best friend, and I would not want to see my best friend kill herself.

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Answer #2

yea its awesome its exactly what usually happens so I think people would like it because maybe they feel the same way keep on writing because…your good lol :)

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