tell me what you think about this poem too..xD

I love it when. by lola

I love it when we’re together. I love it when you call. I love it when we can’t remember why we’re in love at all. I love it when my name rolls off your tongue like a sigh. I love it when you scream. I love it when you keep me up at night just so I can NOT get that call I’ve been expecting. I love it when you make me crazy. I love it when I scream at you. you know I really love you, baby, because lovin’s all I know how to do. I love it when you won’t introduce me to all of your close friends. I love it when your presence suffocates me, when you make me feel like we’ve reached the end. I love it when you show up with a new girl on your hip. but I especially love it when we both know that she’s not worth shxt. I love it when you tell me all about her, you make me a jealous disgrace, but it’s hard to keep my cool when I miss the way you taste. I love it when you come crawling back after you made me cry and I love it when I take you back and pretend I don’t know why.

Okay. Tell me whatchu think! :]

Answer #1

that is cool…!! brill awsome whatev I love it hehe…

yuh shud write a poem bowt likeing sumwun but being confused bowt them lykn you…just a idea I have that prob haha

Answer #2

That is an awesome poem with a great meaning but to improve I would cut the lines so they are about equal length and try and make it rhym so the poem has a steady flow =] But it’s a great poem non the less =] xx

Answer #3

In essence it is quality. To improve upon it, cut it down to ten beats per line, using ten syllables. It will give the poem a steady rythmn and it will flow well. Trust me. Iambic pentameter is a sure sign of quality poetry.

Answer #4

Well, free verse is called free verse for a reason. Idc about making it flow. Not everything has to flow… Which is basically what makes it easy to relate to poetry in my opinion - because life wont always flow perfectly. I’m making my poetry more human-like in a way..

Answer #5

the end is what made it great, but the end might need the begging to make it good

Answer #6

It’s simply AMAZING!!!

Answer #7

I didnt reele like it what you were saying was nice it just had to be put in a different way

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