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This is my new poem Go to my questions for my first one Thank you In my corner in depression Choking of intoxication My hollow shell moans for you by my side But I realized you lied I stop to think for one moment Trying to understand what you meant I think of what I’ve done for you Of what I had to do Im left there All you do is stare As I die You never cry I hate you more then any one But your eyes stun Why aren’t you mine You my drug im binned As your hatred devours me Blinding me so only you can see Your impression burns into my soul Your heart is made of coal Your banshee voice Decides my choice Your siren looks activate my tourniquet All other memories I for get Im gone no more My wounds are no more sore Left to forget My life I regret Sorry for any misspellings im not good at spelling

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Answer #1

SO much more better… I can actually somewhat pay attention to the actual poetry than the massive spelling errors. =]

I liked your descriptions. very vivid. also, I like the comparisons. all the metaphors, similes, etc. it conveyed the mood quite well. very nice poem. ^^

Answer #2

Thanks, I really liked it. Reminds me of my writing. Go and comment my poems?(:

Answer #3

thanks I write them everyonce in a while one day im going to sell them

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