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Honest feedback about my poem?

Will you please take some time and let me know what you think of my poem or what I could do better? It’s about a young girl whose father is a drunk…

I came home to find you sitting there, with hatred in your eyes. I did not know just what I did, why I believed all the lies. It wasn’t another bad day at work or another fight with mom, You promised to just have one drink, you promised to stay calm. Yet I came home to see the bottle empty on the floor. Why does it make you so angry? Why don’t you love me anymore? You say I am ungrateful, you say I’m not worth what you give. You wonder why you brought me here and why you let me live. I go upstairs again, the tears not unknown, I wonder when you will put that bottle down and my daddy will come home. The next night is the same, yet one more bottle wasted, more anger building up and one more drink tasted. You say that you will stop but you do not tell me when, you leave me here to wonder when this nightmare will end.

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Answer #1

really good poem. When its from the heart it means more, good job

Answer #2

Very moving, very very moving and sad…

Answer #3

I really like it. Its deep, the type of poem I enjoy. I like writing this type of thing to, if you want to check out mine you can look at in on my profile. Its in the first question I asked, I think the title is like “What do you think of my poem” or something along those lines.

Answer #4

I love the poem its sad and moving at the same time

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