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each of these pieces of poems are seperated by stars

**changed the pattern of routine the black and white city scene the suits and ties the hidden lies they marched on through the great divide

true soldiers,city-molders they stay cool as the cities smolder

*Id rather let you take my place than move out of the way they say slow and steady wins the race but im last anyway

–and thats okay

*searching for a prayer with my good eye closed nothing but a jesus christ pose

[I hope no one gets mad over that that would be ridiculous anyway what do you think?]

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Answer #1

dont worry,I appreciate it!

Answer #2

It’s quite boring, sorry… Im just telling the truth, don’t take that so much.

Answer #3

deffinately not boring.

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