What do you think of my poem? [Kiss]

I wrote this is like, 5 minutes,so it’s not that good, but it describes how I felt…)

Kiss;;

I was scared, I couldn’t do it, I couldn’t face you, I couldnt blow it.

I dodged you several timees, untill the last, when I stood up to hug you, you locked down on your grasp.

you hugged me tighter, and didnt let go, and as I looked up, it was too late to say no.

you leaned into me, I couldnt resist, I procedeed forward, and we began to kiss.

yet after a second, you drew back, I still couldnt breathe, but I began to relax.

the worst was over, our first kiss was done, yet I still loved it, our kissing had jsut begun.

the next time I saw you, I hugged you from the side., keeping it light hearted again, yet the gesture was denied.

you grabbed my waist, and pulled me in tight, you squeezed me gently, but I only felt fright.

you leaned over me, and when I looked up, there was your face, and I had enough,

instead of resisting, when you leaned in closer, I slowly inched forward, and you bent your head forward.

it seemed like forever, but then it happend, our lips touched, and it felt like heaven.

we stood like that, but it was over as soon as it began, and two seconds later, you were gone, yet again.

so I’ll think of that moment, and replay it in my head, waiting for next time, when we can kiss again

Answer #1

Two things…one: it’s good two: this should be in writing&literature not love&relationships even though it is about a relationship, it is still a poem

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