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Poet- I Will Smile.

Sadness is not my beginning; Happyness is not my ending; But cry is were I started; A Smile I planned before I ended.

Knowledge is the start of pain; Which hard to get and harder to gain; But when you know, the final is pride; You will smile because, you know you survived.

Finaly, I speak in the tone of air; Where a glimpse of light shine to my prays; Hope and faith pour down to me; Where It kills the lies and makes me smile.

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Answer #1

YEAAHHH!!! I’ve just gotten this poem in my head just seconds after the LONELY IN THE SOUND poem…THXXX>>>!!!

Answer #2

That’s a really great poem :]

Answer #3

On the technical side of things you need to change the spelling to ‘happiness’ and the word ‘smile’ doesn’t need a capital letter. Also in the third line it’s ‘where’ not ‘were’ (sorry to sound like the spelling and grammar police).

I also think the line: ‘But cry is were I started’ could maybe sound better with ‘But tears are where I started’ - what do you think..?

I really like the second stanza, it’s very good :)

Answer #4

wow…I didnt realize my spelling but what can I do…Im just a human<-(obviously cover up)…but its a typing error..k…not my mistake except the happyness part… so sorry…

I dont agree much on ‘tears’…bcause baby doesnt have tears yet…if im not mistaken, I think cry is better… THX…

Answer #5

Ohh This is Cool. Have you ever Thought Of Becoming a Poet?

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