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What do you think of my poem, Days of Dismay?

“I know you may be in a mood. Yet, there’s no reason to be crude. You may be sad, depressed, or down. Just fake it: be happy; be a clown” That’s all I ever hearken. No matter if I am heartbroken. Or If I am just in dismay. “Tomorrow will be a better day.” Is what they’ll tell me. No one will ever see. “Tomorrow things with change.” Tomorrow, I will be in dismay. Yet again, no matter what they say. The days being alone, will stay the same. I’ll be hiding, with no sense of any fame. “get over yourself, people have it worse” Thats why I never talk about it, never converse. They tell me the same thing every day. I know people do, they don’t have to say. So I never talk about it, and be quiet. Just cause I don’t like to be in the riot. The riot of which is the world, which we live. No matter what, these days. Will never change, and will always be in dismay.

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Answer #1

Really good!!!!!

Answer #2

I love it! How long did it take yo to write it?

Answer #3

A bit sad, but well written- hopefully there are also “Days of Joy” in your future…

Gracias for sharing your words & feelings,

M.

Answer #4

About a day, not to long.

Answer #5

haha, doubt it.

Answer #6

thanks

Answer #7

This was pretty good!

Answer #8

hmm, it was good, a little simplistic maybe, but it has some good description and creates feelings of empathy, so in all, pretty well written!

Answer #9

I loved your poem ican tell it came from the heart.

Answer #10

thanks, it did.

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