two of my short poems let me know what you think please

Time days go by in hours and minutes memories pass in heartbreak and fear the minutes have passed only seconds remain but the blood is so thick I cant see the blade

 Past

no matter what it doesnt go away the haunting past so much pain to remember it hurt to hide in fear for now I sit in a puddle of tears

Answer #1

there good I liked them both I liked past most its great!

Answer #2

I liked past

fave lines were:

to remember it hurt to hide in fear

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