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Please comment my poem

It’s a little weird but whatever. Before anyone reads this I’d like to thank everyone who has read and commented on my previous poems. I hope you enjoyed them as much you all said you did. You guys mean the world to me!!!

What would my life be like, If I put my heart inside my head? What kind of words would I write? What was that phrase I always said? Take my mind and squeeze it between my lungs. Maybe then I’d know who to love, who to hate, Who to trust, and who to shake. What if I had a brain, instead of a heart? A heart besides a brain? Maybe then I’d be smart, Or maybe I’d just go insane.

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Answer #1

sounds like you already have..lol..but it was powerfully spoken..very imaginative

Answer #2

nyc!!! if you have ny further plans in this go on… Its really good. :)

Answer #3

It was good

Answer #4

I like it -you think outside of the box. Definatly keep writing.

Answer #5

wow it’s really beautiful! Wish you cud tteach me 2 write like that

Answer #6

goood.

Answer #7

that is so great! you think outside the box, it’s very descriptive, and it has a lot of thought in it. it has everything! keep up the good work! this one is a ten as well.

Answer #8

WOO HOOO. I APPROVE!!!

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