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so long I’ve been waiting for tomorrow to be the day. Night after night praying this will be it, it’ll all be okay Growing impatient, Waiting for my willpower to shine through Each time I try, I give in to tempation All the pain I will endure doesn’t need a mention For it will be worth it all Each time I try all I do is make my throat sore. I want to be knocking at deaths door I want to be so weak and pale In this task I will not fail. Am I such a disappointment now? Yeah, I’ll never be stood on that stage taking a bow But in myself I will be proud I’ve been screaming for so long, so loud You’ve never heard or seen me cry You probably think its just one big lie Ignore me, hate me Think what you like of me I think the same, can’t you see I want to change? Doing this is the new range. I know what I want, But I just can’t deliver. One day you will see why, One day YOU will be proud.

Marked it anonymous because I’d rather people not knowing who has wrote this. Its abit personal, but I would still love your opinions.

This poem is basically about my life. How right now things haven’t been going very good at all. A few months ago I develped an eating disorder. I’ve been so many times I’m a failure by my parents - but they’ve also apologized and said they were just upset. I want to really make them proud. I just need to find the right way to do it. Which hopefully, “One day I’ll make you proud.”

Toodles.

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Answer #1

Wow, I at times also feel the way you, and I can promise you that the best thing that you can do for yourself at this point is take some time out, pretend that you were the author of your life, how would you have written out your life to be, looking at all those achievements, now ask yourself, in my current situation - what is stopping me from reaching these goals, draft down all your a obstacles, and let your main focus be breaking down these things that set you back, in your case your say, you want your parents to be proud of you, sit down with ask them what they want out of you, draw a bucket list, try your level best to reach for the sky, if there is something that they want that you feel you can’t deliver, let them know, and tell them why, and what you would rather do instead, I promise that once you get those out the way, you will know all your forth coming steps,

The best way to get your parent to listen to you is to get them out of their comfort zone, offer to take them out for dinner, they will be pleased, speak to them then.

(And by the way, your poem is beautiful, you are talented, you are really good at expressing yourself, this makes you a great artist)

Good Luck

Answer #2

Deep :,}

Thats a really beautiful poem x

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