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What do you think of my poem?

One heart, One soul, What’s Love without it all? What’s my life without you? Does this even mean anything at all? One touch, Your touch Give me the chills, A hug, And a kiss I think Im falling for your sweet lips So take me by the hand Swift me off my feet Cause I never felt anything like this… Listen to the sound of my heartbeat, It’s saying your name, It’s also saying I Love You And forever it will stay the same.

I wrote it for my boyfriend. So? opinions please (: x

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Answer #1

I like it. only thing I’d change (keep in mind this is purley my personal opinion so if you like it how it is LEAVE IT) but I would remove the ‘even’ from Does this ‘even’ mean anything at all? and change ‘Give me the chills’ to ‘Gives me chills’

great job mate! your bloke’ll love it.

Answer #2

Oh I forgot :O after “I never felt anything like this…”

Im above the mountains, I can reach the sky. With you by my side, I feel I can fly

Answer #3

lol that wasnt really on my original one but anyway thank you :)

Answer #4

good with rhymes :)

Answer #5

awww cute!!!

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