My Poem. Comments?

Ashes Ashes

The temperture’s rising. I know that you knew. Because I could feel Your sense burning through.

Others push us along, But we move at our pace. We will doubt all we want, But you still make my heart race.

You know what your smile Does to my mind. You know all my weaknesses. None left to find.

Come take me away. You know my desire. Yet you leave me alone To burn in your fire.

The way that you light it* ‘Till impossible to tame. It’s waiting for you To finally put out the flame.

When the beginning arrives We will make it last And the flames will never Turn us into ash.

For now is not always. We won’t wait forever. When the heat’s finished rising We’ll melt in this together. -Jayna Elsie Harford♥

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Answer #1

very nice.

~Kaff~

Answer #2

I really truly like it! Good job! I am not one of those that says I like it to be nice- its good- really good!

Answer #3

well I love it:) it’s sweet:)

Answer #4

I dislike it intensely.

Answer #5

AWESOME!!

Answer #6

Nice love poem I like it!

Answer #7

Wow, did you write this? It’s really good. (Honest!)

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