What do you think of my poem about moving from one location to another?

I hate it myself, we are moving the our Allen spa and I had to write a little poem about it. This is the first draft, subject to change with varying annoyance leave.

Moving day

Packing crap for places unknown. Moving sucks, away we go. Have a truck, all full of stuff. Where they go, hell I don’t know. Stick them here, no put them there. Gosh I really, don’t even care. Its moving day, O’me O’my. Well will I make it, maybe by July.

By: Chris

Answer #1

Moving? I lived like a Gypsy for the first 32 years of my life, lol.

The poem is quite negative…think about it this way - fresh start, new beginnings…sometimes you just have to look at things with rose-coloured glasses ;)

Answer #2

So are you looking for an opinion on the poem, or if people like to move? Cause I love moving, keeps me active, and the poem, well, slang never goes over well in poems, but its original and satirical, short and sweet.

Answer #3

Well we would not have had to move if the landlord would not have doubled the rent.

Answer #4

I love the poem, it’s so real…regardless of the slang! I love moving, it’s full of excitement…New horizons, New beginnings.

I say bring it on…to New Days, New clients & More Money! :P

Answer #5

You know what? Accept it for what it is….I went through a similar situation years ago, and wouldn’t you know it - shortly after I moved out, the basement flooded….sometimes, the reasons for needing to do things don’t show themselves until later on, but there’s always good reason.

Answer #6

Well, like have a question about moving, we are moving one of our business, the employees love it, they leave, we do all the work and then they come back to a new spa. I hate it, moving a company is very costly. I just hope the return is good.

Answer #7

uh oh colleen your emotions are showing. jk

Answer #8

TY, my wife got a laugh from it to, I have another job today, so the rest of the move is on her.

Answer #9

Usually I move every couple of years. I love moving, its a new adventure with all new opportunities!

Answer #10

You are right, there may be good behind this, and I think the location is better anyway.

Answer #11

Doubling your rent? Is that legal?

Answer #12

Well I did move all the time when I was with the Government. I think I just got burnt out. I like to travel, but when you travel you are not moving everything from one location to another.

Answer #13

Awe, poor her…I would have loved to help…I love packing, done it so many times I am actually great at it now! lol Send her my best wishes!

Answer #14

i’ve gone to 6 schools and i’m in middle school i hate moving cause you have to pack and you realize that everything that is your life fits into boxes its just not a good feeling and leaving people behind being the new kid and everything its horrible and now my parents want to move to south carolina i hate sc its the one state that during the revoluntionary war didn’t let slaves enlist in the army and other reasons but yea i HATE it

Answer #15

Well we bought this company and no it is not illegal, but it is unethical.

Answer #16

Well, she is more just watching people pack, she is the boss, now when I was there she made me work.

Answer #17

I see, so that is why you left huh?! :P

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