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Graveyard Keeper TM

I watch over the deceased In the cemetery, they forever sleep Their headstones act as head boards of beds

The layers of dirt like a thick warm blanket Guitar I play, beside their stones The music is much the same as a lullaby

I read the scripture on the graves, Singing them like songs as I play I re-discovered what I noticed the other day

Roses placed by stones have long been dried up and dead Years old flowers, fresh flowers have yet to replace It seems as if when one dies, their existence is erased

Darkness falls making scriptures unable to be read, Leaving me without another song to sing Yawning, I curl up to the grave I know so well

On it is a note I wrote out myself This is the only grave possesing a live rose With cheeks wet, I close my eyes

I watch over the deceased In the cemetery, they forever sleep For now I rest

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It needs a little work, to make the words flow together, but it’s really good. Kind of depressing but besides that I liked it! :] Hope that helped a little bit

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