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What do you think I should fix on this poem?

its hard to go through life with nobody by your side Its lonley, scary, and unawaring part of my life I was alone no one was ever home, a loner at school walking from southeast to spring valley having to go through allies because the streets were too damn deep I remeber I was just three years old when I held my first knife and wow was my dad ever “proud” from that moment till now I’ve learned that you can never let your guard down.

I was a bright misunderstood child but while I was climbing up the steps of age I learned that my parents weren’t to easy to play even though they neglected and disrespected I still loved them wanting to hug them and be loved but know im older with a pile of bricks over my shoulders and now I see behind their lies now I pay the price with too many tears flowing from my eyes..

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Answer #1

no offense, but your poem doesnt sound like one. heres how it should sound like: its hard to go through life nobody by your side alone, no one home, no one at school

you get it? ;)

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