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Thoughts on my poem?

I just wrote this poem about myself. What do you think?

That shy girl

I miss you kayla, where do you hide when these people come around? I wish I knew the way to show you out But once again I am stuck Inside myself I have so much to say at times But still I remain with duck tape over my mouth

I want to run, so far where no one can call me shy I want to scream, at them and show them but I remain mute I want to let go, and reveal who I really am And most the time I just want to join in laughter And become more like them More like the girl hiding inside

I don’t want to stay mute forever But I don’t know how to press play And every time I open my mouth the words get lost on the way Maybe if they could see who I really am Or if I could find myself They would acknowledge me And they would like me, I think They would talk to me and I would talk back I would laugh at their jokes And once, I would be there in the room But still, I remain invisible

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Answer #1

wow.you have some good talent! your poem is the best poem I have ever read in my life! keep it up don’t fall.

Answer #2

That’s really good and I sounds like me now lol :) but anyway that really good

Answer #3

you have a lot of talent, I absolutely love this poem and it really reminds me of the way I was in school. (keep up the good work) , so truthful! <3

Answer #4

Great! I think it’s amazing.. I am a pretty shy person also.. I have been hammering away at my shell for about a year now and I’m starting to open up a little.. The way I have been doing it is I have been forcing myself into awkward situations… Talk to other shy people. They don’t talk back as much so you have to try a little harder to make conversation and well, for me it’s really hard. But I have been talking to chicks way out of my league lately haha. So I hope I helped (even though that isn’t what you were asking for) Well, maybe your sub conscience was..

Answer #5

thats really good I used to be shy too then I opened up and believe me its so much better so push urself to try to not b shy because once you open up ull see tha difference and say to urself I wish I had opened up earlier like I did =)

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