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A poem for my boyfriend

“when I am in his arms im in heaven When I lean into his kiss nothing else matters When I look into his eyes every thing is perfect When I hear his voice time stops When I hear him say I love you we are the only 2 people on earth When I see him my heart stops When I hug him everything is right “

What do ya think … Please tell me if I should give this to him

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Answer #1

OF COURSE THAT IS THE BEST POEM EVER READ ON EARTH (only because I never read poems but still)THAT IS SO SWEET I LOVE IT SO ROMANTIC!!!

Answer #2

its a very sweet poem…he should like it…I like the repeating the when I… a very nice poem

Answer #3

I wouldn’t have the talent to do one like that. very sensitive and excellent poems..

Answer #4

awwwe…

he’ll love it.

may I suggest a change? I would change “when I hug him my heart stops” to “when I hug him my heart skips a beat” or something like that. you had already used “stops” with his voice :) it’s a cute little poem and I think your boyfriend will LOVE it!!

Answer #5

welcome :)

Answer #6

well thank you and I will be sure to change that before I give him I apperciate the suggestion and your opinon

Answer #7

yes girl thats good

Answer #8

I like it. He will appreciate it.

Answer #9

it’s so good really

Answer #10

yes this is really really good!

Answer #11

my heart goes somewhere else and in my dreams I wonder “does he still love me”

Answer #12

just think of so=umethin you and him been thru… think of all de good times and de bad times.. write how you feel bout him…

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