what do you think of my pooem?

a poem I wrote after my heart was “terribly breaking”.

terribly breaking

if only you could see what youre doing to me my hearts teribbly breakking fromm all this jealousyy

with your handd on her side and your fingerss intwined its just killing me inside I cant bear to see

this is all I can hope for this is all I can dreamm that one day youll see the girl for you is me

im still terribly breaking from the pain you caused within as my heart explodes like fireworks everytime youse kiss so deadlyy filled with bliss

the parts are everywhere im shattered and im torn at the heart I wouldd ask to be fixed if I could only find the parts..

oo im just so terribly breaking and its beyond my control im just terribly breakingg but I knew I couldnt have it all..

Answer #1

its good but it seems to me its rather cliche

Answer #2

I agree with chicken little

Answer #3

I like it, but its a little angsty

Answer #4

haha thankss(:

Answer #5

I love it. seriously.

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