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What did you think of my friends poem?

She wants to put it in a writing competition and I said it was good but what do you think I am just a girl so shy and unoticed just waiting to spread my wings and fly just waitng for the real me to come out the real me that wants to be free and enjoy lif with noone judging me or trying to put my spirit down I don’t want to be shy I want to be as free as a bird She says that’s just the first part

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Answer #1

need to be more good times in it it does saying “im in hell save me”

Answer #2

its not really that original, tell her instead of writing about spreading her wings to fly, tell her something like gasping for air as I flop on the surface, I wanna be put back in the water and be set free to swim away to a better place… (ex, a line from a poem of mine,)

Answer #3

I think it good. I can really relate to it. and if she wants to put it in a copetition I cay GO FOR IT!!! you never know what could come out of it until you try! have fun and good luck!! ^_^

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