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Sometimes I feel trapped, Like a hamsterin a bal. There is no way to get out, And no one hears me call. Iwant to push the escape key, I want to get away. I have to see the sunlight, But there’s no other way. My eyes cant see the exit, My hands cant feel the door. Ican’t do this any longer, Icant take this anymore. Because what if there;s no escape key, What if there’s no door? What I there’s no sunlight, I can never be quite sure… So ill just have to take it, For as long as I can stand. Ill have to stay in darkness, Unless someone gives me a hand.

Ps- please be honest, because I know there is grammer plroblems, but other than that, what do you think??

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Answer #1

I like it - definatly keep writing!

Answer #2

Nice, keep up the good work.

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