My poem of a night I cant forget

Fault

Why can’t we be the same, Theres not just one person to blame, We are a family that needs tamed, And all I feel is shame, When the night has came, I think about my day that has suddenly turned grey, I hear the nasty things they say, Just when I think things are getting better it all turns back around, It’s like I’v got bad kama or im cursed with a spell. These arn’t the childhood memories I wish to tell, I just want it to be normal..have a normal family like everyone else.

Soo whta you think and this is a true poem not a hanky im bord thing..!x

Answer #1

I think this was a really good poem…I can definatly relate to you I dont have nowhere near a normal family and sometimes I just wish we could be normal even if its just for one day…

Answer #2

haha ok thnx um I was angry dont think I really cared how it rhymed

Answer #3

FAULT

why can’t we be the same, theres not just one person to blame, we are a family that needs TO BE TAMED, and all I feel is ASHAMED, when the night has COME, I think about my day that has suddenly turned grey, I hear the nasty things they say, just when I think things are getting better it all turns back around, it’s like I’v got bad KARMA or im cursed with a spell. these arn’t the childhood memories I wish to tell, I just want it to be normal..have a normal family like everyone else.

sorry but there were mistakes and you will see that I corrected your spelling but I do have to tell you that your punctuation and grammer needs to be worked on and unfortunately its not the best poem either, I didnt relate to it but keep trying because practise makes perfect and with much hard work there is only room for improvement

Answer #4

I really like it!!

Answer #5

Not very good

Answer #6

hehe yeeah I sorta figred that wun owt…

Answer #7

No family is normal =P

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