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Run to freedom" All alone in this cruel world… I'm falling… Faster and faster… Into a dark hole…nothing but emptiness inside… I feel my soul leave my body as I fall… I've lost my way, losing those around me… They fade further away as I fall further into this empty hole… I hit the cold, damp ground…Bleeding from the inside… Bleeding from the outside. I'm dying inside…Losing my breath, losing myself. No longer alone in this world I'm bound to live… But now chained in the pits of hell. Hot burning flames ignite around me… Trapping me. I feel death coming closer and closer… Closing in on me… I scream over and over for help… Why isn't anyone helping?? Why won't anyone come?Does anyone even care anymore? Or are they all selfish? Not caring about anyone but themselves? No matter… Death almost has me in its grasp… I run…I'm free.But not for long. Death, fear, hate, anger… Will find me, will continue to chase me. I keep running… Searching for a glimpse of hope.It's hard to find, But I will find it. I will beat this battle against death and all evil that surrounds me. Some day… Some day...I will no longer be alone.
Too many ... s And no offense but it sounds pretty amateurish Like somthing I would write when im in a state. It's cool and stuff but some of the 'chained to burn in the pits of hell' sounds a tad cliched. Edit it a bit and it would be cool though
Pretty good, sounds like Paul's real life struggle. When we get low, the Lord will not let us fall any further than our knees, then the only direction is up!... With Him. Cool.
... this sounds to average. it's got a good start but then it just sounds like something a 7th grader could write.
I think its really good! is this like how you feel and stuff? or have I missed sumink and am a bit dippy lol
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