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How...can someone help me with this story?
So, this girl slept with this guy who wasn’t her boyfriend because she was drunk. Her boyfriend said it was fine but then him and the guy the girl slept with got in a fight. Her boyfriend kicked the guys ribs a few times and was taken away by a teacher and now the girl is alone in the hall with the guy she slept with…she helps him up and now…I can’t think of anything else. What could happen?
I think you should create more drama. If her boyfriend really didn’t care, he wouldn’t have gotten in a fight with him right? So, he cares, that establishes him as the “good guy” of the story, which also kind of means that the guy she slept with is the “bad guy”. But instead, I think you should switch the story up a bit. Define the guy she slept with’s charachter more, aka, make him a “good guy”(make up an excuse for him for why he was at the party or somthing). Take him out of the wrong so she is eventually torn between the two and has to choose. It should’nt be like oh he(party guy) just made a 1-time- mistake and he’s a perfect little angel, no no, that’s the job of her boyfriend. He(party guy) has to be only temporaraly in the right; if he keeps making mistakes throughout the story, then you’ve created a situation in which the reader is curious to find out who the heroine chooses. But it leaves them room to root for whichever guy the reader is hoping she chooses. Define BOTH of their characters so its harder for her to choose. Lol, I know I’ve ranted on a long time, but I figured I might as well have fun imagining it while I was at it =) in any case, I hope I’ve helped, and good luck on your story!!
Her real boyfriend is a real jerk and he is spelled from school for a week after that fight. The guy he slept with starts helping her with her life problems and they both start falling for eachother :) I dunno lol something like that?
…while helping him she tries to fight back new feelings she discovers she has about him, then walks away second guessing her relationship with the boyfried?
…she finds out that he has a lifethreatening disese and hates her boyfried for hurting him?
…she has a flashback about a time when her father beat her as a child and cant ever look or be close to her boyfried again because of what he did?
hopei helped :)
well they think they could be falling in love - immoral but a story
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