Help me with my Poem Please

Okay so this is my poem so far!! I dont know how to end it >;[ Also.. I want to add in it somewhere stuff like this. ‘ for you is who id want to walk along the beach Holding you Soft Gentle Warm hands (something like that) ‘ to be with you, and to spend my whole life with you, is like a dream come true!

  • Sometime I miss you so much it tears me apart. *I wish things could be more simple than what they alredy are. __ this is the Poem !

I could never explain why I love you so much, It’s your eyes, your smile, your soft gentle touch.

I awoke this morning with you on my mind remembering your smile I was remembering your arms around me love the way they always feel warm with you by my side I completely feel safe

I was remembering your voice so sweet the way it makes my heart skip a beat but without you baby my whole body’s weak

at least I have memories I miss you more than words can say, I’ll always love you til the end of time

I get this amazing feeling from my head down to my toes, I cant explain it I’m like the only one who knows You can’t image how crazy you drive me. I feel like nothing will ever be same Sometimes It’s like being in hell for all eternity..

I’ll always love you, Nothing can take that away. I just don’t know what to do anymore So many things on my mind

I wish I could be the one by your side Telling you everything’s gonna be alright I wish I could be the one who falls asleep next to you at night And the one you make up with after a fight

I knew that you was special I could tell right from the start I remember every word Everything uve ever said I hope one day You will look at me and realize That everything I say Is truly how I feel inside

Perhaps one day… You’ll see past the age, The looks, The outer skin, Through to what’s underneath. That maybe I could make you feel, Like you’ve never felt before. Give you what you’ve never had before.

You’ll tremble when you hear my name, Go weak when I’m near you, Feel faint when you talk to me, Be so in love that you thought you could never feel this way about anyone…

Answer #1

Hi!!! I can help you…I’m an established poet myself…your poem is nice…seems like you really want her forever…which is nice…but your ending is just fine as is…just take out “about anyone…” what about a title for your poem?
I hope this helps…let me know how it goes…your final poem.

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