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is this a good poem ? =| help please.

I got home from school, not a word. My mom in her room, my siblings playing with his toys, this is my world. I feel like sometimes my mom doesn’t even care. For my birthday, she just gave me a teddy bear. I hate teddy bears. I think its sad how my mom barely knows me, but yet she “loves” me. And then I get to school, and you are all I see. I would kill to walk down the hallway and have our eyes at least meet. I would kill for you to even talk to me. I would kill for you to give me something. Maybe a teddy bear. Even though I hate teddy bears. I won’t shed anything but a tear. A tear of joy, even though you’re just a boy. Then again, there’s always that one boy. That fills you with happiness and craziness. And that’s you. And even though, at this point, You barely know I exist, You’re everything to me.

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