Could this poem win a poetry contest?

Could this poem win a poetry contest? Please give honest opinions!! I already asked about this poem, but I had to lengthen it and change it a bit for it to qualify to enter the contest. What do ya’ll think?

Inner Strength

If you can start the day off without caffeine, Be cheerful, ignoring aches and pain; If you can resist boring people with your troubles; Never needing to complain; If you can eat the same food ever day, yet still be ever so grateful; If you can understand when loved ones are too busy to give you time, and still never be hateful; If you can overlook when people take things out on you, if you can take criticism and blame, If you can face the world without telling lies, and conquer tension all the same; If you can relax without a drink and sleep soundly through the night; If you can be neglected daily and still be very polite; If you can risk your life for the ones you love, although sometimes run astray; If you can entertain yourself with old things never a desire to display; If you can love yourself for who you are and never feel the need to change, If you can be happy wherever you stay, and never need to rearrange; If you can love the fresh air and be outside for more than an hour or two; If you can withstand extreme temperatures, yet still be as good as new; If you can last a day without being fed, and spend a night in the cold; If you can be obedient yet still be very bold; If you can wander the streets alone and always still survive; If you can love the things you have and never need more to thrive; If you take life as a journey that is always homeward bound; If you can understand being forgotten yet have a home to be found; Despite the hazy mist in your life, despite all of the fog, if you can do all of those things, you are probably the family dog.

Answer #1

It wouldn’t win, but keep writing nevertheless.

Answer #2

I think that thsi is a great poem and you have talent. I think that it would win the contest hands downn … I also I love writing poetry to but I just write it for me and soem of my friends and this poem is awsomeee** keep up the greatt workkk =) I look forward to reading moree <3

Answer #3

I personally find the repitition for its length anoying. You do have some talent though, and I’m sure you can get some good results

Answer #4

I personally find the repitition for its length anoying. You do have some talent though, and I’m sure you can get some good results

Answer #5

That is a great poem… keep writing them they are great

Answer #6

I love th poem it got me. I was wondering if you were abused, I wasn’t expecting the poem to be about a dog. thats why I liked it. I write too, for years, and I have a lot of poems

Answer #7

I love the poem, it got me. I was wondering if you were being abused, I wasn’t expecting the poem to be about a dog. thats why I liked it at the end. great twist! I write too, for years, and I have a lot of poems

Answer #8

Thats amazing! Im sure it’ll do GREAT in a poetry contest.

Answer #9

You could send it to Hallmark and make a lot of money off of it. But it’ll never win a poetry contest.

Answer #10

Clean up the rhythm, and you’ll be fine.

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