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The Earth & I Poem..

The water hits the road. My water rolls down my cheeks. The wind blows softly. My wind is short and loud. Vines hang like nooses. My noose hangs like a snake. The Earth turns. I know it’s my turn now. Continents go forward. I go forward now. Thunder crashes. My camera flashes. The Earth is still. I’m still…forever.

Your thoughts? I wrote it while I was waiting for the bus.

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Answer #1

wow! you wrote it while waiting for the bus??? THIS SH*T IS THE BEST AND YOURE TALENTED FOR F-IGN WRITING IT THAT FAST!

Answer #2

I love it! if I didn’t have to wait at a bus stop with my sister I’d be writing too. and I get it- I think. but anyways it’s great and I’m looking ofrward to seeing more!:)

Answer #3

its quite good.. like mentioned it does have a somber/gloomy ffeel to it.. poetry is about expressing your self so mayb you felt sad at the moment and wrote this or mayb not watever the case may be.. anyways good job and keep writing

Answer #4

ummm…it was gud I dont think I get it thoe…but it sounded depressing…what does it mean?

Answer #5

It’s really good! but very very sad.

Answer #6

I’ve read a lot worse on this site.

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